Tuesday, 3 July 2018

Letter home war writing.



This is all about a war topic that we picked I think at the beginning of the year and I chose to write about me pretending to be a soldier in war and write a letter home.  
Dear Mum,

Life in the trenches is horrible mother, the mud is dark as oil. Everywhere I go I can hear gunshots as loud as 20 people yelling as loud as they can. I see rats the size of cats running as fast as they can run. Everywhere I go they  run trying to find little leftover food. The food is terrible here, they give us dry crackers and its really dry, the corned beef is disgusting. Body lice, ticks and flies are everywhere and everyone is scratching or trying to whack all the fly ' away. I’m always on night shift with my pal Ben in the front line. One time we were on night shift we accidentally shot one of our own that was bringing ammo. Then we lied about it so we wouldn't get in trouble. Every time I go out on a walk me and Ben always have our guns at the ready just in case. If you are wondering, yes, I have been injured in the leg but it's getting better. One day when we were running out of bombs,  this guy tried to use a tin can to make a homemade bomb. Well I better end this quick I think the battle is about to break out again!. Write back soon

Yours sincerely,
Joshua
Tawa
4 lytton road




Because I've research to find out what war was like. Which helped me to create the letter home.

3 comments:

  1. Joshua, this is a gripping piece of writing that really brings out the horrors that the soldiers had to endure in war. I could vividly picture what this soldier was going through. I have never seen rats as big as cats - how awful would that be? I am really interested in how you found out all this information - was it in a book? Have you drawn a picture to go with this writing? If you added a picture that you drew to this post it would really add to you being a "Smart Learner" on our blogging rubric.
    Ka pai to mahi.
    Mrs Torrie
    Manaiakalani

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  2. Kia ora, I am reef from Riverdale School.
    I really liked your story.
    I learnt that you really like rugby
    Maybe you could make another post.
    If you would like to see my learning visit my blog <a href="https://”http://riverdalegisreeft.blogspot.com/”>here</a>

    Mā te wā
    Reef

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  3. Kia ora, I am sonny from Riverdale School.
    I really liked that you pretendid to be a soldier
    I learnt that you love you mum i do to
    Maybe you could spend more time with you mum
    If you would like to see my learning visit my blog http://riverdalegissonnyt.blogspot.com

    Mā te wā
    sonny

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